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“Your poems should be more positive,”
By a ‘critic’ I was informed.
“It seems in negativity, you bask.”
I thanked him for his insight
And his incisive interpretations—
“But if it’s your opinion I’m seeking…I’ll ask.”
He said to add more humor— We all could use a laugh.
“Your wordplay can touch some very sensitive nerves.
You should cut down all that nasty stuff at the minimum, by half.”
Some optimism is what every poem deserves--
Again, I pretended to contemplate
His freely offered advice.
I thanked him again his opinion for sharing.
“I’ll seriously take your comments under advisement,” I said,
Assuming the expression of someone honestly caring.
As we parted, I reminded him how every opinion counts,
And how insightful were these observations of his.
He just smiled, saying: “Now, you’re just jerking my chain!”
I said: “Great. You really do know what sarcasm is!”
B. Kite – 6/10/2024
"Feedback"
“Your poems should be more positive,”
By a ‘critic’ I was informed.
“It seems in negativity, you bask.”
I thanked him for his insight
And his incisive interpretations—
“But if it’s your opinion I’m seeking…I’ll ask.”
He said to add more humor— We all could use a laugh.
“Your wordplay can touch some very sensitive nerves.
You should cut down all that nasty stuff at the minimum, by half.”
Some optimism is what every poem deserves--
Again, I pretended to contemplate
His freely offered advice.
I thanked him again his opinion for sharing.
“I’ll seriously take your comments under advisement,” I said,
Assuming the expression of someone honestly caring.
As we parted, I reminded him how every opinion counts,
And how insightful were these observations of his.
He just smiled, saying: “Now, you’re just jerking my chain!”
I said: “Great. You really do know what sarcasm is!”
B. Kite – 6/10/2024