Tip #2) Clarify & Condense

This was another partner project where the objective was to write a paper about dissent and disagreement.

These are about half of the drafts, the other half are at his house.

Honestly, after this project I really wanted to dissent against AP Lang.

 

The top three sheets of paper are the prompt, the original handwritten one paragraph response, and the typed up revised one paragraph response.

 

Below that is one of the rough drafts. Here is where we hit some problems. No way was the teacher going to want to read 8 pages about dissent! Hence we had to 'clarify and condense' our random tangents that did actually relate to our thesis.

 

The next row of papers there is another rough draft, also heavily edited and proofread. It wasn't clear enough. Nor was it short enough. 'Clarify and Condense."

 

So then comes one of the final drafts of the same paper. We added in another paragraph and a bibliography, because there were more requirements, and all the other paragraphs were somewhat shorter, so it was okay for us to do that. And still, our ideas were random, too long, and didn't relate enough to the thesis. We needed to be more concise.

 

'Clarify and Condense'

'Clarify and Condense'

'Clarify and Condense'

 

The bottom is the final draft, most likely 'clarified and condensed.' Notice, that was past tense!

We got an A.

And we learned our lesson, do it from the beginning, then you won't have so many edits.

Done